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Show Topic: Script Passes

What We're Looking For

You have a finished script. We help you do passes on your script, like "Show, Don't Tell" passes or "Fewer Words" passes.

Types Of Passes We Like To Do

  • "Show, Don't Tell" passes: Many screenplays explain the characters intellectually instead of revealing them through action, which would be far more impactful and interesting. We go through your script and find ways to replace words and descriptions with actions.
  • "Avoid The Truth" passes: Most characters in screenplays are very one-dimensional, and say exactly what they think. But real people jump through hoops to avoid saying what they really feel. We rewrite scenes to make the characters avoid coming right out and saying what's on their minds.
  • "Fewer Words" passes: It's agonizing the read scripts with too many words. We go through your script with a big knife and find ways to turn three sentences into one. The end result is a more pithy script that jumps off the page.
  • "Authenticity" passes. If you have characters that are very different from you (different race, gender, background), or a story that happens in an environment you're unfamiliar with, we'll bring a person with this background/experience on the show to help dial in the representation. The goal isn't to be PC, but to create nuanced characters that feel more real.

If Selected For The Show

  • We'll need need a release from you to appear on the show and discuss your story.
  • You will own the result of the work done on the show, with no credit or compensation due to any of us.

Go Ahead And Submit!

  • We'll only respond if we're considering you for the show. But don't feel bad if you don't hear back. Not being selected is mostly about what makes the right show.
  • You will not be added to any email list.
  • Any project pitches will be kept confidential, will not be shared with third parties, and are deleted if we pass.
  • If pitching a project, you release us from liability, should anyone connected to the show be working on a similar idea. Improbable, but not impossible.